Reddit reviews Shortcuts to Songwriting for Film & TV: 114 Tips for Writing, Recording, & Pitching in Today's Hottest Market

Short answer: No.

Long answer: Is it easy to listen to? Sure. Do all the pieces fit together? I guess so. But am I going to shell out money for something like that? My sources say it's unlikely. And I'll tell you why.

Instrumental music these days is relegated to what I see as 2 categories: Dance music and TV cues. TV cues are what you hear in the background on TV shows. In a moment of suspense you'll hear music that makes you tense. If you start pay attention you'll find there's all kinds of instrumental music all-over television. If that's the route you want to go, here's a good resource

However if you want to be known as an artist, I would do a couple things. First I would make your music danceable, because no one is going to just sit and listen to slow instrumental electronic music. Unless you're sixteen and have a ton of time on your hands, maybe. But the average listener of this type of music is going to hear it in a club-type setting where they want to dance. So pick up the tempo, around 120-135 bpm is where you probably wanna be. Also consider adding a hooky phrase, works well in that genre. Think "Harlem Shake." Lastly, I would work on building more throughout the song. As a lyricist, I know that the climax of my story should be the last line of the bridge, my verses should be relatively "level" emotionally speaking, and my choruses should pick it up but not blow my load (that's what the last line of the bridge is for). Anyway, find a structure you can copy and also copy how others use that sort of climax.

Keep working, you're farther than I was when I was 16 that's for sure.