Reddit Reddit reviews The Hunger Games Trilogy: The Hunger Games / Catching Fire / Mockingjay

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2 Reddit comments about The Hunger Games Trilogy: The Hunger Games / Catching Fire / Mockingjay:

u/LazyJones1 · 7 pointsr/suggestmeabook
u/I_am_number_7 · 1 pointr/DestructiveReaders

GENERAL REMARKS

 

I liked this story; I thought is was intriguing and I want to know more about The Seeker Society. I was disappointed it was so short--looking forward to the next installment.

 

MECHANICS

 

Title

 

The title fits the story and I thought the title worked well. It doesn't reveal anything about the genre, but that isn't always necessary. I thought the title was the right length.

 

 Hook

 

Seemed like this was meant to be the hook. I think it should be placed earlier in the story, but I get what you were doing with the scene setting in the beginning. I think the story flows well.

 

Sentence structure

 

The sentences were easy to read. I disagree with some of the other critiques; I thought you did a good job introducing the characters and showing Paige's boredom with her life. 

 

"Maybe they couldn’t fly to Paris, but surely they could take a road trip. She’d decided to research on her own."

 

 

SETTING

I'm curious to see what the Seeker Society is going to be about. Will it be similar to the movies The Game or Nerve? 

 

https://www.amazon.com/Nerve-Jeanne-Ryan-ebook/dp/B007FEPPB8

 

There was some description of the setting but I thought there could have been more:

 

"Jason’s muddy work boots on the carpet and the crumpled papers he’d scattered on the kitchen table."

 

"There was a tumbler on the coffee table and Paige knew it would be half-full of cheap vodka."

 

"The mess of opened containers and sauce packets were visible around the corner"

 

Maybe you could include some details about Paige's workplace; that is part of the setting. 

 

 

STAGING

 

There were a few sentences that I thought revealed a bit about Paige's character by the way she interacts with her environment:

 

"The clutter frustrated her, but she’d been meaning to clean tonight anyway."

 

 

This tells me she likes neatness and order around her. She might be a bit of a controlling person, but not overly.

 

CHARACTERS

 

Jason and Paige seem to be opposites: he is a bit of a slob and a homebody, while Paige is a neat and organized person who wants to travel and have adventures. Jason could easily be the antagonist throughout the story.

 

The antagonist needs to have goals though; and Jason doesn't seem to have any.

 

PLOT

 

The story ended before it really delved into the plot or the goals of the characters.

 

PACING

 

The story dragged a bit during the scene where she is researching on her computer. Also, I think it would make more sense for her to do that research on her home computer. Since Paige's job doesn't seem to be a big part of the story you might want to cut out that part altogether and just have her do the research at home. Jason seems to do his own thing, so it would seem Paige would have a lot of free time when she is not at work.

 

DESCRIPTION

 

The descriptions were fine; except for Paige's workplace, which I already mentioned.

 

POV

 

Since Paige is the MC and the story is told from her POV the story might work better told in first person. I could be wrong, but I thought the third person narrative you chose resulted in too much exposition.

 

Stories in first person narrative can be very popular. Here is a good example

 

https://www.amazon.com/Hunger-Games-Trilogy-Catching-Mockingjay/dp/0545670314/ref=mp_s_a_1_5?keywords=hunger+games&qid=1574215656&s=books&sprefix=hunger+&sr=1-5

 

Also an adventure story!!!

 

DIALOGUE

 

I thought the dialogue was fine; I didn't notice any problems there.

 

Closing remarks

 

Your story definitely needs to be longer. I haven't checked yet to see if posted an update; I hope you did. This is a strong beginning; keep writing!!

 

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