(Part 2) Top products from r/write
We found 14 product mentions on r/write. We ranked the 31 resulting products by number of redditors who mentioned them. Here are the products ranked 21-40. You can also go back to the previous section.
22. Family Cursemas (The Megamillionaire Murders Book 1)
Sentiment score: -1
Number of reviews: 1
24. Shadow of a Dead Star (The Wonderland Cycle Book 1)
Sentiment score: -1
Number of reviews: 1
27. Two Gentlemen of Lebowski: A Most Excellent Comedie and Tragical Romance
Sentiment score: 1
Number of reviews: 1
28. On Writing: A Memoir of the Craft
Sentiment score: 0
Number of reviews: 1
writing advice from horror-meistro Stephen King, a fine softcover
29. The Valley of Fire
Sentiment score: -2
Number of reviews: 1
Used Book in Good Condition
First, congratulations on having written something. Many of us end up thinking about ideas and never taking the time to get them down. My critique is rather heavy in tone, but I want to be clear: that doesn't mean your piece is without merit. Keep writing.
I think you can safely call the piece fiction.
Your grammar is generally fine. That's based on a quick read-through. Your best friend here is a copy of The Elements of Style.
"An" instead of "a" in the last sentence, paragraph six. That sentence is also a rather long, clunky fragment. I don't mind fragments, especially if they have a certain punch to them. This fragment does not. Avoid it and others like it.
The only other grammatical change I'd recommend is in paragraph five: "They would've to do..." While "would" and "have" do combine to make that contraction, it feels out of place with the infinitive "to do." Instead, try, "They'd have to do..."
It's difficult to critique something both unfinished and this brief. I will say that the opening is generic and uninteresting. It strikes that unpleasant balance of being unimaginative and over-reaching. Your idea, when you start writing about it, is more engaging. Would you consider shaving the first few paragraphs down to one or two? Alternatively, you could open with a very short (I'm talking 1-2 sentence) exposition on the technology.
I hope that is helpful.
Story by Robert McKee. This will show you The Matrix.
Story Grid by Shawn Coyne. This book will take your novel from vague concept to power-outline.
Also excellent is /r/Mistborn's lecture series, available for free on the Youtubes. It's aimed at fantasy and sci-fi writing but has plenty of relevance for any other genre.
I've had two successful self-pubbed novels with a third one coming soon and these are the resources that took me from scrub to author.
Since Shakespeare adaptations are in the Internet news today, might as well shamelessly plug my print book, Two Gentlemen of Lebowski — a fully-annotated, beautifully-illustrated, historically-accurate mashup of the Shakespearean canon with guess-which-movie. It is surprisingly educational—about Elizabethan times, a movie you thought you knew, and why my flair on this subreddit is "Offbeat or Quirky".
Praised by Entertainment Weekly, USA Today, The New Republic, GQ, The Wall Street Journal, The Guardian, The Toronto Star, The Atlantic, Metro, Back Stage, Broadway World and the Folger Shakespeare Library, not to mention Jeff Bridges. But that's just their opinions, man.
That library looks like the anti-panic room.
Also, I have to plug Dave McKean's Cages, he did all the sandman covers. They both did MirrorMask, too, along with the Henson company.
Another recent non-traditional is S by JJ Abrams and Doug Dorst. It takes the form of an old library book that was passed back and forth between two people making notes in the margins as they attempt to unravel the mystery of the author's identity. Comes complete with various prop items stuck between the pages of the book-postcards, photos, news clippings, etc.
This is my writing bible, for whatever its worth...
Book Title: Memories of the Dead
Author Page: http://www.amazon.com/Phillip-Hall/e/B006SPO3JA/ref=ntt_athr_dp_pel_1
Book Pages (there's three of them):
http://www.amazon.com/Memories-of-the-Dead-ebook/dp/B006SLTXMG/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1328277100&sr=8-1
http://www.barnesandnoble.com/w/memories-of-the-dead-phillip-hall/1108117337?ean=2940013687004
http://www.lulu.com/product/paperback/memories-of-the-dead/18815860?productTrackingContext=search_results/search_shelf/center/1
Twitter: https://twitter.com/#!/philhall1969
Blog: http://crazyflipperfingers.blogspot.com/
Facebook "fan" page (made by me, so it's official): https://www.facebook.com/pages/Memories-of-the-Dead/318272974871094
Shelfari Page: http://www.shelfari.com/philliprhall
Goodreads Page: http://www.goodreads.com/user/show/7464768-phillip-hall
Hmmmm okay, let's try the Curiosity Quills Press indie catalogue on for size:
Enjoy!
THE NY BOOK REVIEW SAYS...quit calling.
HOT VAMPS AND ZOMBIE PRESIDENTS...not included.
MULTIGENERATIONAL FAMILY SAGA...my ass.
The Valley of Fire, by Brett Cottrell.
When a rogue angel starts a polygamist cult in Utah, all Hell breaks loose.
http://www.amazon.com/Valley-Fire-Brett-Cottrell/dp/0615567479/ref=ntt_at_ep_dpt_1
http://brettcottrell.blogspot.com/