(Part 2) Best teen mystery & thriller books according to redditors

Could it be The Hunted by Alex Shearer?

Here are a few of the YA series I have enjoyed:

• The Skinjacker Trilogy by Neal Shusterman. Link to first book, Everlost. Link to second book, Everwild. Link to third book, Everfound. It is a series following a group of teenagers who find themselves stuck in afterlife-on-earth after dying. These books are FANTASTIC; I'd put them on the same level as The Hunger Games.
  
  
• Also, I'd recommend Unwind, also by Neal Shusterman. "In America after the Second Civil War, the Pro-Choice and Pro-Life armies came to an agreement: The Bill of Life states that human life may not be touched from the moment of conception until a child reaches the age of thirteen. Between the ages of thirteen and eighteen, however, a parent may choose to retroactively get rid of a child through a process called "unwinding." Unwinding ensures that the child's life doesn’t “technically” end by transplanting all the organs in the child's body to various recipients. Now a common and accepted practice in society, troublesome or unwanted teens are able to easily be unwound.
  With breath-taking suspense, this book follows three teens who all become runaway Unwinds: Connor, a rebel whose parents have ordered his unwinding; Risa, a ward of the state who is to be unwound due to cost-cutting; and Lev, his parents' tenth child whose unwinding has been planned since birth as a religious tithing. As their paths intersect and lives hang in the balance, Shusterman examines serious moral issues in a way that will keep readers turning the pages to see if Connor, Risa, and Lev avoid meeting their untimely ends."
  
  
• Peeps by Scott Westerfeld (same guy who wrote Uglies) follows the world as it falls into a unique sort of zombie apocalypse, started by non-fictional a parasite which resides in over half the population's brains.
  
  
• The Chaos Walking Trilogy The Knife of Never Letting Go, The Ask and the Answer, Monsters of Men follows Todd, a boy trapped in a world completely made up of men who can hear each other's thoughts, finds something he has never seen before: a girl.
  
  

Strangelets by Michelle Gagnon

If the Read It To Believe It thing isn't correct, it also sounds a bit like Under a War-Torn Sky

Could you be looking for something in the SYLO Chronicles?

Maybe Code Name Verity? It has war and a very strong platonic love. And even humor, although it’s of the heartbreaking kind.

1 - The Recruit

2 - Zenda 1: Zenda and the Gazing Ball

Internet Detectives?

http://www.amazon.com/Bandits-Internet-Detectives-Michael-Coleman/dp/0553486209

Danger.com?

http://www.amazon.com/Gemini7-Danger-com-Jordan-Cray/dp/0689814321/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1343318689&sr=1-1&keywords=danger.com+1+cray

People will probably think this is lame... In sixth grade I read The Doom Stone.

I don't even remember if it was actually a good book or not, but the creature on the cover along with how vicious it was in the book really scared the shit out of me.

ugh, her talking about it "gently rasping" her fingers reminded me of this book, Reef of Death by Paul Zindel. A few scenes where the baddies drop cages over victims heads with these killer snails in them that quickly rasped away flesh.

The Gallagher girls books are really great.

Someone recently published a Young Adult book based on a similar premise:

Your One and Only

Sort of a Lord of the Flies meets Gattaca.

This is a nice cuddle up and read e-book set in 1930's England in a manor by the seaside.

Enjoy it for only 99¢:

Amazon Kindle: http://www.amazon.com/Mysterious-Octavius-Incredible-Machine-ebook/dp/B004EPYUC6

Barnes & Noble Nook: http://search.barnesandnoble.com/The-Mysterious-Case-of-Doctor-Octavius-Plums-Incredible-Ever-After-Machine/Alexander-Scott/e/2940012715326

GENERAL REMARKS

 

I liked this story; I thought is was intriguing and I want to know more about The Seeker Society. I was disappointed it was so short--looking forward to the next installment.

 

MECHANICS

 

Title

 

The title fits the story and I thought the title worked well. It doesn't reveal anything about the genre, but that isn't always necessary. I thought the title was the right length.

 

 Hook

 

Seemed like this was meant to be the hook. I think it should be placed earlier in the story, but I get what you were doing with the scene setting in the beginning. I think the story flows well.

 

Sentence structure

 

The sentences were easy to read. I disagree with some of the other critiques; I thought you did a good job introducing the characters and showing Paige's boredom with her life. 

 

"Maybe they couldn’t fly to Paris, but surely they could take a road trip. She’d decided to research on her own."

 

 

SETTING

I'm curious to see what the Seeker Society is going to be about. Will it be similar to the movies The Game or Nerve? 

 

https://www.amazon.com/Nerve-Jeanne-Ryan-ebook/dp/B007FEPPB8

 

There was some description of the setting but I thought there could have been more:

 

"Jason’s muddy work boots on the carpet and the crumpled papers he’d scattered on the kitchen table."

 

"There was a tumbler on the coffee table and Paige knew it would be half-full of cheap vodka."

 

"The mess of opened containers and sauce packets were visible around the corner"

 

Maybe you could include some details about Paige's workplace; that is part of the setting. 

 

 

STAGING

 

There were a few sentences that I thought revealed a bit about Paige's character by the way she interacts with her environment:

 

"The clutter frustrated her, but she’d been meaning to clean tonight anyway."

 

 

This tells me she likes neatness and order around her. She might be a bit of a controlling person, but not overly.

 

CHARACTERS

 

Jason and Paige seem to be opposites: he is a bit of a slob and a homebody, while Paige is a neat and organized person who wants to travel and have adventures. Jason could easily be the antagonist throughout the story.

 

The antagonist needs to have goals though; and Jason doesn't seem to have any.

 

PLOT

 

The story ended before it really delved into the plot or the goals of the characters.

 

PACING

 

The story dragged a bit during the scene where she is researching on her computer. Also, I think it would make more sense for her to do that research on her home computer. Since Paige's job doesn't seem to be a big part of the story you might want to cut out that part altogether and just have her do the research at home. Jason seems to do his own thing, so it would seem Paige would have a lot of free time when she is not at work.

 

DESCRIPTION

 

The descriptions were fine; except for Paige's workplace, which I already mentioned.

 

POV

 

Since Paige is the MC and the story is told from her POV the story might work better told in first person. I could be wrong, but I thought the third person narrative you chose resulted in too much exposition.

 

Stories in first person narrative can be very popular. Here is a good example

 

https://www.amazon.com/Hunger-Games-Trilogy-Catching-Mockingjay/dp/0545670314/ref=mp_s_a_1_5?keywords=hunger+games&qid=1574215656&s=books&sprefix=hunger+&sr=1-5

 

Also an adventure story!!!

 

DIALOGUE

 

I thought the dialogue was fine; I didn't notice any problems there.

 

Closing remarks

 

Your story definitely needs to be longer. I haven't checked yet to see if posted an update; I hope you did. This is a strong beginning; keep writing!!

 

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https://www.amazon.com/Minecraft-Crash-Official-Novel/dp/0399180664/ref=mp_s_a_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1549489555&sr=8-1&pi=AC_SX236_SY340_FMwebp_QL65&keywords=minecraft+the+crash#

Somehow, I dont think so...